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Oh, that red light groove.
Welcome to the land of
blood on blood
red, fresh blood to sait hungry demons.
Sex-starved, crazed
that red light groove is a madness, baby.
Take a good look
they prance the streets nude
covered in a red light
and their angels sport
bloody halos and carpart wings.
©2004-2009 ~Arrogance
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A poem I had to write in Advanced Creative Writing about the red light district.

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I like this! You did a great job creating an image of the red-light district. It was very effective in bringing your reader there. You also set the mood by using moreso negative images, and sarcasim. It created a good reading expierence!
The diction was great, the words made the scene come alive! The flow wasokay, good line breaks, but the puncuation was a bit lacking. No much, but just a little!

Keep it up!

Greg!

--
To be positive at all times is to ignore all that is important sacred or valuable...
To be negative at all times is to be threatened by ridiculousness and instant discredibility...

-Kurt Cobain [1967-1994]

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February 2, 2004
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